No, I'm not a goon. Don't freak out and call me a quarterback. I hate sports. And calling people 'quarterbacks' just to re-affirm your self appointed title of geek doesn't mean squat. Most people on SA aren't quarterbacks the last time I checked. And they may be, dare I say it, *geeks* too. I hear some of them are even *gasp* FURRIES! Save your high school insecurities for your next circle-jerk, ok?
I think your comic is a little slapped together. With your storyline, a three panel format just doesn't work. It's better suited to a comic with a new mini story arc each page, and to one which is humorous.
I can see that your drawing ability has improved minimally since your first page, but unless you plan on colouring, you should try minimalising your line art so it doesn’t look as messy. And the lack of backgrounds makes it hard to remember where the hell your characters are.
I also find it hard to follow the story without reading and re-reading until my soul dies just that little bit more.
And the mutant boobs scare me. Alot. They add this creepy, Freudian quality to the whole thing which is so prevalent in alot of the sci-fi furry comics. But who am I to judge your...style? You're not forcing me to look at it, but honestly, you can't have a web-comic without critics. That's what happens when you put *anything* on the net; people stumble upon it, see it, and they may not like it.
I am by no means a good artist, or even that great at drawing, but I think anyone can see what's wrong with your comic.
You want constructive critisism? Here you go.
And calling people 'quarterbacks' just to re-affirm your self appointed title of geek doesn't mean squat. Most people on SA aren't quarterbacks the last time I checked. And they may be, dare I say it, *geeks* too. I hear some of them are even *gasp* FURRIES! Save your high school insecurities for your next circle-jerk, ok?
I think your comic is a little slapped together. With your storyline, a three panel format just doesn't work. It's better suited to a comic with a new mini story arc each page, and to one which is humorous.
I can see that your drawing ability has improved minimally since your first page, but unless you plan on colouring, you should try minimalising your line art so it doesn’t look as messy. And the lack of backgrounds makes it hard to remember where the hell your characters are.
I also find it hard to follow the story without reading and re-reading until my soul dies just that little bit more.
And the mutant boobs scare me. Alot. They add this creepy, Freudian quality to the whole thing which is so prevalent in alot of the sci-fi furry comics. But who am I to judge your...style? You're not forcing me to look at it, but honestly, you can't have a web-comic without critics. That's what happens when you put *anything* on the net; people stumble upon it, see it, and they may not like it.
I am by no means a good artist, or even that great at drawing, but I think anyone can see what's wrong with your comic.